Having irritated an old wrist sprain, I’m working on edits when I wanted to write fresh for the Camp NaNo novel writing challenge. ~sigh~ It still feels good to work on something.
And here’s an example. The original:
Nickolas stood abruptly, tearing the robe off
in a violent gesture. It took an eternity to float to the floor. I barely
New and improved:
Nickolas bounded upright, tearing the robe
off his arms. It took an eternity to float to the floor. I barely breathed.
What do you think? Better?